huh. Well, I *really* appreciate the effort. I'll just say that there were a lot of mood-killing usage/grammar issues. There was almost one on every page. Good stuff: the editing looked very clean to me. I've never edited anything so maybe I'm missing something that a well-trained eye would see.
I agree with jay. Do a grammar check. There are some parts that don't flow very well. You don't have to translate the japanese word for word. I've done it before and I tell you it's no easy feat. Just do some improv but still stick to the point. Don't be afraid to disconnect sentences in different bubbles. not sure if that makes sense but if you've had enough experience you should know what i'm talking about. :)
Instead of posting a new gallery every time you complete a chapter, you should just replace the old one. Makes it easier to keep everything together and all of the comments across the entire project can be preserved.
Yeah, thank you everyone. i know there's something huge that make me can't enjoy this chapter. about updating old gallery, i don't think it's effective for reader.. well.. ok. i'll do that.