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[Kinbou Sokai (Konmori)] Polluted Lover (Ultimate Girls) [ENG] (Machine)

Doujinshi
Posted:2012-05-04 17:30
Parent:488425
Visible:No (Deleted)
Language:English  RW
File Size:14.30 MiB
Length:27 pages
Favorited:2 times
Rating:
31
Average: 1.17

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Posted on 04 May 2012, 17:30 by:   aridchimp    PM
Uploader Comment
A small side project for an artist I love.

Forgive me for ignoring the male sex talk...but you can hopefully imagine the jist of it anyway 8)

I tend to love Yuri romance, especially when it is doomed.

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EDIT: OK OK I WILL TRY TO MAKE IT CLOSER TO EXACT TRANSLATION 8) I'll fix it soon...I'm doing a bubble for bubble translation for you guys 8p

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EDIT 2: Here is my best shot...again, it is hard to tell the exact story in a different language, but hopefully this helps some people understand this wonderful doujin...
Posted on 04 May 2012, 07:41 by:   Hitsuyou-H    PM
Score +177
Machine TL? This seems to be a borderline rewrite.

Edit @aridchimp: Your writing isn't bad (at least I don't think so), but honestly, beyond a few key words here and there, I can now say with confidence that this should not be called a translation. Way too many liberties taken up to page 11 (I've read up to 15 so far) - add that to the context errors that follow, and the monologue diverges vastly from the original.

Edit2: Okay, so attempting to classify this release really, really confuses me. There's this part in the middle that isn't too far off, and it makes the early-middle pages ever so slightly more plausible, but then it goes back to rewriting toward the end. what is this I don't even ¯(ºдಠ)/¯
Posted on 04 May 2012, 20:22 by:   aridchimp    PM
Score -29
Thanks for the criticism...ur right, I kinda took this as my own story instead of his...i'll try to fix it

BTW, I don't really care for input from "more experienced translators"...I do this out of my own fandom and could care less if I make money or fans...

...also, I'm lazy

EDIT 3: You make a good point. I will remake it, and try to improve 8)
Posted on 04 May 2012, 20:21 by:   Red of EHCOVE    PM
Score +81
Rewrites such, and attract hate.

Translations are preferred. I would suggest checking the Cove of Translators on the forums, you can also ask questions there and get input from more experienced translators.

Edit: Also, I'd suggest you make this gallery private, and/or upload the new one as a new one, rather then update. If for no other reason that the first version ruined this gallery's rating (22 votes for 1 star).

Edit 2: And if you don't care for input and want to be lazy, then I guess you are fine with critism, 1-star rating, and the fact that your own comment is almost downvoted. If you don't care for us... we don't care for you. Sorry if that sounds harsh, but that's the reality here.

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