Seriously, stop translating. I can't even count the number of (unforgivable) mistakes in french and literal translation in this doujinshi. If you can't even speak french correctly, don't try to translate things.
Edit: plus lack of editing skills (see page 18).

Base +5, Sushilicious +31, WLyon +28, shadows_kami +6, Bahamute +13, danixxx +31

Je pense pareil que Qweritys, ta traduction comporte un nombre incalculable de fautes de français, sans oublier les bulles de la trad anglaise que tu n'as pas pris la peine de remplacer.

Base +8, Sushilicious +31, WLyon +28, shadows_kami +6, danixxx +31

Une belle traduction de merde.

Base +1, Sushilicious +31, WLyon +28, shadows_kami +6, danixxx +31