I'm trying to make my own manga, and i want to get your opinion with it so I wish i can continue it with more confidence, thanks
I add some tones and inked my next page so it take more time to finish page to page, sorry

Nice drawing, keep it up, I cant wait to see your finished works!

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Why'd you censor it?

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@Coma

Ongoing works are fine.
http://ehwiki.org/wiki/Expunging#Garbage

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I agree with chivoef. This is great, but it could be much better uncensored.

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I like it..next time make more then 2 pages so we can see how the line stroke-progressing can be maintain in constant quality
"thump up" for your effort
ever consider to draw using PC tablet... just asking! ^_^

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@hidayater :
thanks bro...

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Looove it ^^

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Not bad so far... Looks like an old hentai anime ala Urotsukidouji too... Also, makes me wonder... It gonna be like newer tentacle hentai stories (girls get fucked and kept around or the monster just leaves) or those older tentacle hentai anime (girls are basically fucked to death by tentacles)?

It sure as hell looks like one of those older, darker stories.

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Don't censor it :)

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Great work! Thumbs up! I hope you'll drawn more.

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1. See a title "My Own X"
2. Think this is going to be absolutely horrible.
3. See it's actually quite good.

Thank you for surprising me.

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Really not bad, keep it up :) As others said, it would be great if you could remove the censor.

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Thought it was Hinata.

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Nice another Artist!!
hang out with us here
https://forums.e-hentai.org/index.php?showforum=16

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great! more

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Looks great, keep it up!

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This is quite good, but I notice that there's no scenery.
While not a big deal in a Hentai manga, it does make the experience of reading it more enjoyable.

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Very nice!
And while it would be better uncensored, I wish more hentai was censored this way, instead of crappy mosaics etc.

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Without getting into nitpicking and specifics, it's a good start. Keep practicing.

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This is really good has a little touch of these underground comix from
the earlier days. I went to evening school to learn something about drawing
Manga/comics but i am far away from something like this. Go on , show us more!

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wow, this is really good! My only suggestion is to fix girl's legs on frame 1. Near the knee area her thigs are much more thinner than her legs, look kind of weird IMO (i outlined this area here - http://i.imgur.com/QN7Xl.png)
Good luck with the rest of the manga :3

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@Vawgie :
Keren bro, salut...!!

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