Overall a decent translation,this is a bit challenging to edit, but I saw the top right dialog bubble in image 6 with some letters on the outside of it.Maybe a smaller font size. Also I am not sure, but did you redraw some of the bubbles?
Not sure if the impregnation tag is justified here. Miki just mentions it two times but there's no clear indication of that actually happening. Personally I think it should be downvoted.
Base +7, FudgeSickle -6, basedoracle -6, BartSSJ +7, jsnormandy +10