I can't read Japanese, but overall the translation flowed pretty well and was relatively free of spelling and grammatical errors ("really" is spelled wrong on page 8). Thanks for the contribution!
Why do they always do countless rounds with condoms, then start to go bare? it doesnt make sense, why not make it like that from the start? it always bothers me when this happens, otherwise, great translation.
@Darkestvamp, You are right that it should nto be impregnation without any verbal or visual indication of it.
From the wiki: Should be obviously relevant to the story, not just whenever someone ejaculates inside a woman.
Either visual or verbal proof is needed; verbal needs to assert that the character actually is pregnant, and not simply expressing a wish to become so.