Oh my god, Nikkousen girls are so amazing. Those bodies are pure sex.

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For CGRascal, this isn't too bad. Except on page 7, he uses the word distinction incorrectly. It would be better to say that "an 'example' needs to be made" of the two girls by punishing them. And on page 12 in the bottom panel: "I'll still continue" remove the word 'still', it sounds better. This did not have a lot of dialog which was to your benefit. If you had this proof read, then good for you. The only serious error was the misuse of the word distinction. Thanks.

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need reseed pls ty

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Big boobs that are not ridiculously oversized, on bodies with just that little extra fat that makes them even sexier.

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you little slut hiryuu...i would slap you right back.......

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