This is my first attempt at translating.
Feedback is welcome.

There are some points where where the character's thoughts are in third person where it feels like they should be in first person.
Page 14 "Lick off the semen from my feet" is worded oddly and may be better as "Lick the semen from my feet" or "Lick the semen off my feet".
Pages 15 and 20 The acronym 'lol" feels really out of place.
Page 16 "But it still stinks, so you'll be me a new pair, won't you?" change "be" to "buy".
pages 16, 17, 20, and 22 (giggle) would be better as *giggle*, as parenthesis usually indicate inner thought or occasionally things that are said in a hushed voice.
Page 20 *Him* would be better having emphasis drawn to it by making it italic, as asterisks usually indicate noises.

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Came if for straight heterosexual sex.

Spends entire time looking at male characters dick and him licking his own semen.

Doesn't even get to see a nipple.

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@ jonhddd

well, when you see 'Girls ForM' in the title next time, you'll know what to expect.

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I like femdom but this was kinda disappointing

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>File Size:124.7 MB
What you did to bloat it so much?

Here is so useful guides for editing manga:
How to save b/w or color image:
http://www.insidescanlation.com/etc/How-to-edit-manga-with-Photoshop/rawr/editguide/3.html
Typesetting guide:
https://mangaconda.wordpress.com/typesetting-introduction-from-vaelis/

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"I don't like being creeped on."

"Why?"

Densest MC award, anyone?

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This would be great if it weren't for the last page.

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https://mangaconda.wordpress.com/typesetting-introduction-from-vaelis/
is down.

Is there an alternative link?

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allright but where's the rest of it? If I wanted to see someone lick the floor I'd hire a immigrant to do housechores. None of them even take off a sock, what is this? victorian england?

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Art 6. Plot 6. Sexiness 6. Translation 3. All out of 10.

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