That would be my second English translation, but I still have no native speakers wishing to proofread these, unfortunately. Hope My errors won't be too bothersome.
Enjoy!

I absolutely adore the moth girl!

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Definitely could use some proofreading, and even some translation checking. It's definitely not unbearable to read but it could flow much more nicely. Props for the effort nonetheless.

Man I loved seeing Mashiro being top tier waifu material. It's an interesting shift from the previous 2 entries from this series, I wonder if the author plans on releasing more laid back stories like this. I'd definitely be in support of it.

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Not being able to get a sexy monstergirl as a wife.

Why even live?

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From yandere to deredere,

MOTH GIRL IS BEST GIRL.

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so very cute

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There's no nymphs like monster girl nymphs.

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Moth Wife 2016. It's really lovely to see this switch from time-travel rape to sweet vanilla.

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So a nympho nymph from the looks of it (nymphs are a family of butterflies and moths for anyone who didn't pick up on my wonderful subtlety).

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The artist said on his twitter that he's doing a fourth book for 'bad end'.

My body is not ready.

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Moth-chan....Moth-YANDERE-chan.

Dick diamonds yata yata.

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If you're not finding some way to get home early for this cuddleworthy wife, then you are a criminal.

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MOTH PUSSY

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I was hoping for a continuation of last time, so we could figure out exactly what's going on, but I'm not even disappointed. Moth waifu best waifu.

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[Pleased moth noises]

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she will be the death of him... but what a way to go... ^_^

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You know, I think the all-night coitus sessions may be the reason he has to work more hours.

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This is what happens when the yandere wins? I'm sold.

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Dear Lord.
I want to live that guy's life so bad.

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This makes me want to marry a moth and this is coming from a catfag.

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Thought Meta said he wouldn't TL this because people was bitching about no English before the Russian TL?

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blasphemy! where is my yandere? (╯°□°）╯︵ ┻━┻

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[PLEASED MOTH NOISES]

Hey, I think you did a pretty fine job for a non-native speaker, and I like that you are upfront about needing proofreaders (unlike one cancerous fucking nob we all know on this site). Keep up the good work, and I hope you are able to find good proofreaders to help you out soon.

Last edited on 05 June 2016, 05:59.

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One can never be too tired for his beautiful moth waifu.

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My brain is so confused, but my boner knows exactly what to do.

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A good spin-off.

But bad translation...was a little hard to read at times. But st-ill. Th-ank Yo-u for rel-easing!!

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Lol I like this guy's moth girls they are hella cute.

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It made me super happy just to see Mashiro as happy as she is in this book.

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seems moths devour their mate when they reproduce. suck out all their juices~

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>page 28

Finish that shit man!
Also, is that meant to be how all other people see Mashiro as?

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Wait a minute. Isn't this girl from that crazy repeat one...?

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more moth girl?
yay!

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I think it's obvious that any Yandere goes all fluffy if you go on the attack.
Remember guys, if you ever find yourself with a stalker yandere just go all out on her ass and you'll have a top tier waifu!
The things hentai teaches us ...

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Remember how from the last two chapters it was shown that Mashiro could alter reality? Maybe this isn't an unrelated spin-off at all.
Maybe this is just one of the universes that she is able to create and relay to Shuuhei when they were sitting in that shed together.

Last edited on 06 June 2016, 09:09.

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wow , really nice insect wife here ^_^

funny and good story too :D

that lingerie on moth girl , very hot (^_^)

from comment above , it seem there prequel of this doujins , time to read that ^_^

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I didn't read the whole thing but I'm not sure why would you translate pg 17 the way you did.

Ar-r-re you pos-s-sibly ch-h-heating on me-e? Huh?...
...I don't, where did you get this from?..
Nons-s-sens-s-se
No way!
He-he-he. Nic-c-ce.

Checking with the raws, we have
もし浮気してたらどうしようかしら…って
…してないけどちなみにしてたらどうするの？
してるの
してないです
よかったぁうふふ…

Which roughly translates to (optional stuff in parenthesis):
If you were to cheat on me, whatever should I do... Hm?
...I did not, but out of curiosity, what would you do if I did?
So you did
I did not (, Mdm.) <- He's using a slightly more polite speech here
Then I'm glad. Ufufu...

Some of the errors are, unfortunately, undetectable even if you've a native proofreader unless he knows a little Japanese, and at that point you'll probably need another translator instead of a proofreader.

-rant-
Like, I'm rather interested in knowing the motivation behind people altering the original text. Is it to 'localize' a translation? Giving 'life' to the characters' speech? To 'improve' upon the subpar plot in the original work? For 'easier' and 'better' translation flow?

Having learned a little of the language myself, I do understand the difficulty of translating certain phrases while keeping it interesting in English, but surely you can't be so far off that you're 'reverse plagiarizing'(?) a work now, can you? It's translations like these that give me trust issues and prompt me to start learning Japanese.
-/rant ends-

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@Metaphrastes
Fair enough, I just find it upsetting that you decided to do all those "-" thing although there's nothing to suggest a similar speech pattern in the original. This is misleading for readers, whom will naturally assume that it's her quirk or something. (Like, I was getting hyped for that quirk and decided to look for the original, only to realize that she's speaking normally. Don't do this to me man -_-)

どうしようかしら - While your intention is noble, the resulting translation goes against it. Thing is, anyone who had seen enough Japanese cliches (or really, knowing how sarcasm works) will realize that "If you were to cheat on me, whatever should I do... Hm?" is not to be read naturally as a question but rather as a subtle intimidation of some sort. You can emphasize on this by doing: "..., whatever should I do... Hm?". It might be misleading in a novel but when you've a friggin time-space bending Moth Girl giving you the DEATH STARE, anyone would get it. By leaving it as "Are you possibly cheating on me?", all sense of subtlety, and thus the original meaning, are lost.

Btw, trust me when I say どうしようかしら is not an idiomatic expression. Sarcasm != Idiom.

ちなみにしてたらどうするの - I... am not sure what do you mean by "how can everything else (the facts of our life) even comply, if I actually cheated?" means. He's just, literally, saying "By the way - If I did - What will you do", which you translates to "where did you get this from". He's not asking where did she gets the idea that he's cheating from, he's asking what'll she do to him if he actually cheated. This is a very common manzai/joke where the guy plays the apologetic one while his partner berates on him.

After going through a few more pages, I notice that you tend to abuse exclamation mark (e.g. pg2 "I still feel so excited! Ahh, I can't wait for this!" instead of "But I'm happy. Ufufu, I can't wait for this...!" or just generally not subtle with things (e.g. "pg18 We are having sex tonight, right? You're no doubt a nymphet..." instead of "Shall we prove it with lewd stuff? You really like it don't you, doing lewd stuff...". Japanese tends to be very indirect or 'soft' with their words and don't really make direct remarks / exclamations on something. That, and you're really killing the moe moment building up in those scenes （￣へ￣）, which is bad for a vanilla!

Regardless, good effort on the translation. Good luck and hopefully this'll help to improve your future translations.

Last edited on 08 June 2016, 09:30.

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@Kenjimax

Hi, thank you for concern!

Well, first of all I am indeed trying to prevent altering the logic and meaning behind the original, and for this part my desire to avoid literal translation for the merely stylistic and rhetorical parts of Japanese sentences overlapped with the fact that I made a re-translation from the Russian version I made quite some time ago, and forgot the exact original meanings.

Since you went that far to present your viewpoint, I will also try to show you my logic behind the translation:

どうしようかしら, and the conditional form of her statement do (imho) only serve a purpose of adding a specific emotional flow, being an idiomatic expression (Japanese has lots of these!) A wife asking herself aloud whatever should she do in this situation LITERALLY does not sound quite logical (is there a similar rhetoric phrase in English, actually?), so I decided to omit that part.

ちなみにしてたらどうするの: proceeding with this logic, he rather replies "how can everything else (the facts of our life) even comply, if I actually cheated?". Again, someone as timid and polite as this guy doesn't seem to me to be tactless enough to tell this his wife. Considering my version, my Russian translation was, "не хожу, с чего ты вообще это взяла?", featuring word "вообще", bearing the meaning "actually, by the way", which didn't pass through to English, so grammatically that seemed to be correct.

してるの: well, that is indeed my bad, since Russian version had "Ходишь!", meaning, "You [actually] cheat!", and I changed it to another word, trying to avoid repetitions. Sorry about this one. Same goes for 良かった, Russian had "славненько", which contextually means, "oh, that's fine!", "nice, ni-ice…", etc.

I do not state this is indeed true, I may be wrong in my logic, since Japanese is only a hobby for me, and i might have lots of actual mistakes in other sentences. But I really don't mean to alter the text intentionally. Thank you for sharing your perspective, it is really helpful to see things from another angle!

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He finally gave in and took the offensive.

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So, after unknown (probably long) period of time-loops he finally married the yandere moth-girl. Happy End? [Dramatic music]

Seriosly though, would be interesing to see the intequel. How exactly it went from "get away from me, you monster - /time reset" to "I only ever love Mashiro"?

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Im realy interested how did it go from time reversal ,infinite time rape to this lovely situation

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is this the same yandere moth girl from that time loop thing?

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So I guess that whole time loop/mind break/shattered childhood/emotional scarring/dead mom thing worked out in the end.

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I feel like people don't give this guy enough credit, considering he's been locked in a perpetual 10 year long stand battle.

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Moth Wife was performed before a live studio audience.

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You see, THIS is what happens you just accept your moth waifu and get on with it, dumbass. Dumb kid should have just said like, "Sweet, free wife. Got wings and time powers and mind control powers. Nice."

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This bitch is still just as scary and nuts as she is in the other stories. She just got tired of waiting 10 years to rape him so she pulled him sideways in space/time into an alternate reality where she can do it everyday.

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I just assume they got together because she finaly figured out that being a crazy time warping bitch (read the previous two chapters) is not the best way to seduce a man.

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I'm usually totally terrified of moths, but I have mixed feelings on this ... with most coming from the head between my legs.

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So adorably cute, Thanks to all.

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[You are now at side-story 1]

Chapter 1 - 4:


Side-stories 1 & 2:

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