Found on Reddit
Translated by LoveHentai4Eve

Part 1

Some things are best left on reddit.

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yeah back when this was posted on reddit I pointed out the errors to the "translator" but they weren't receptive to the feedback. in hindsight I probably should've done it publicly so that maybe uploaders like you would've avoided posting it here

002
OG: くっ…サイアク
TL: "Ohh..fuck..fuuckk"
ED: she's just saying that this is the worst/this sucks

003
OG: 貴艦隊への全面支援を約束するっちゅうのはどうや
TL: "So might as well plede[sic] your full support to your company to get this deal done"
ED: he's just asking her what she thinks of him giving full support to the fleet if she becomes his private secretary

OG: 艦娘狼致っといて今更そんな条件かよ…でも、ウチの戯隊が深刻な戦力不足に陥ってるのも事実…あたし一人の力で艦隊はみんなを教えるなら,,,
TL: "I'm not sure if I want to do something this weird...but...it's true that our company is in some serious trouble if we don't get this deal done..."
ED: she's commenting on how late that suggestion came and she also considers the effect he could have on her fleet

OG: ガチっガチっ
TL: "God damn it."
ED: this is just chattering sfx

OG: こんなチャンス逃す手はないけど何か裏が…
TL: "And if I can save the whole company with just one person's commitment..."
ED: she doesn't want to give up this opportunity and she also believes there are ulterior motives

OG: でもどうせタダで帰してくれそうにないしな！
TL; "But will they let me go if I comply?"
ED: she's saying that it didn't seem like he would let her off scot free anyway

004
OG: ベチベチベチ
TL: "I'm sticky, sticky, sticky..."
ED: these are just sfx

005
OG: ここで大開脚アクメをキメてしまい脱落だーっ
TL: "Oh, my god she is cumming hard!"
ED: this is announcing her elimination and describing her "spread legged orgasm" (to use your TL from the next line)

OG: 勝者はアトランタ！！おめでとうございまーす！！
TL: "Eliminated because I did a big spread-legged orgasm here."
ED: this is announcing and congratulating Atlanta as the winner

OG: 流石やで♡
TL: "You are a handsome girl."
ED: he's saying she performed as he expected

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Who the fuck highly rates this crap? I fucking swear.

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fuckoff redittors cucks, even /h/ does better translations than this

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