Thanks for the upload! It's one I was missing in my collection!

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raw: https://e-hentai.org/g/862580/a9e3b2f0f3/

Some remarks:
1. Why are you using the downscaled version as a base? Since you uploaded in the past, GP shouldn't be a problem to download the full archive, right?
2. You should credit the people you took the translations from for some parts:
- 10-13: https://e-hentai.org/g/1503323/4d61b033ee/
- 25-34: https://e-hentai.org/s/f22ccb9ada/1202090-19
- 43-50: https://e-hentai.org/g/939812/0887f31504/ (not the exact same, but heavily inspired from it)
3. Your own translations are a bit iffy. Sometimes it just a different way to say the same thing (or something similar) which is fine, but others times it end up being completely different from the source material. The most egregious examples are in the third story:
Page 14, the texts in the top left panels are:
神様にシスターさんとエッチがしたいと祈りを捧げた結果・・・
なぜか小さくなっていた
Which roughly translates as "As a result of praying to God to have a sex with a sister.." "I became smaller for some reason" which then lead up to him thinking that might be god's punishment for making a vulgar prayer.
Then on the next panel:
下劣な祈りをした天罰が・・・乳でけぇ・・・
あんなシスターとエッチしたかったなぁ
which roughly means
"The divine punishment for making a vulgar prayer... her breasts are huge..."
"I wanted to have sex with a sister like that"
Here you omitted the comment on her breasts and the second part.
Then the last panel:
見つかってしまったからには死を待つのみ うぅ。。
Which roughly means:
"Now that I have been found, all I can do is wait for death... Ugh..."
Also pretty sure that the one speaking in the bottom right bubble or page 16 is the girl, since it would be weird for the guy to refer to her clit as "Kuri-chan" plus he's not really in a position to be able to speak in the first place.

That's a lot for one page. Genuine mistranslations are a thing, but it seems to me that you deliberately made those "mistakes", since even using mtl would have got you results similar to what I wrote.

Last edited on 16 December 2023, 20:31.

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