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(C102) [Dokudami (Okita Ababa)] Sewayaki na Osananajimi ga Dame Neet Aniki ni NTRreta Hanashi [Edit]

(C102) [ドクダミ (沖田あばば)] 世話焼きな幼なじみがダメニート兄貴にNTRれた話

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Posted:2023-10-10 18:43
Parent:2702547
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Language:Japanese  
File Size:60.70 MiB
Length:36 pages
Favorited:1003 times
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Average: 3.93

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Posted on 10 October 2023, 18:43 by:   Ineedanadult    PM
Uploader Comment
I've taken the images from https://e-hentai.org/g/2702047/55f29bc4e4/#c6027823 and edited their levels for better visibility. Thanks to Haco, I think we've got the correct order now. But If anyone still thinks otherwise, please let me know. I'm on the fence, but I may make a textless version.
Posted on 10 October 2023, 18:31 by:   Haco    PM
Score +25
It seems natural to move pages 19-21 behind page 29. Because page 19 begins with the MC's monologue about his frustration at seeing the couple having sex. Then pages 20 and 21 are brief flashbacks to how the couple came to be together. And then back to the present on page 30. On page 19, FMC is asked to wear an apron during sex, which she complies with on page 30. The couple then resumes having sex again.
I don't speak English well, so I used a translator. If the English looks weird, it's probably because of that.
Posted on 10 October 2023, 19:35 by:   jcarlosbg    PM
Score +39
Is this a preview version (not sample)? It doesn't' look like a finished work.
Posted on 10 October 2023, 19:53 by:   Ineedanadult    PM
Score +74
@jcarlosbg It's the finished work. I love okita ababa illustrations, but he's infamous for not finishing his stuff on time for release.
Posted on 10 October 2023, 21:13 by:   moranqiancheng    PM
Score +10
又拿线稿充数是吧?
Posted on 10 October 2023, 21:27 by:   Thatbuy    PM
Score +11
又开始画草稿了,离谱。明明认真画挺色的。
Posted on 10 October 2023, 23:22 by:   wenzer    PM
Score +30
BSS都算不上,青梅他哥两情相悦,男主纯纯🤡
Posted on 11 October 2023, 04:39 by:   4JJ9X    PM
Score +6
这作者这么喜欢线稿么
Posted on 11 October 2023, 04:40 by:   小布点    PM
Score +25
这个页码也是乱的,麻了
Posted on 11 October 2023, 06:54 by:   andeseng    PM
Score +10
TMD,不想画可以不画
Posted on 11 October 2023, 07:46 by:   ming56abc    PM
Score +206
首先叠个甲我是入了实体本的,别说什么白嫖党。应该有资格浅浅发表一下看法。我理解大家对于作者恨铁不成钢的心情。

1.ntr剧情铺垫是很重要,带入苦主也好黄毛也好,都需要大量剧情人物塑造来支撑。如果只想撸完一炮放空大脑真不建议看这位作者。为什么每次都是这样的安排呢,我觉得因为老师每次都是全新的独立故事,新的角色。重点不是XXOO戏份,而是想讲一个扭曲看完让人难受的故事,这可能是老师在艺术创作的追求。

2.说充数摆烂都敢拿出来卖什么的,这本会场贩卖价格是100日元,这个价格下有这个页数,我只能理解在做慈善,回馈粉丝或者可能是单纯不想窗了吧,不管内容多潦草,印到这个页数成本是不会低的,于我这类粉丝来说,有的看总比鸽了不出好。这本如果弄成100日元的廉价copy本形式,哪怕只有做爱的那三五页,我也觉得可以接受。实际这个价格能有如此内容我是超级惊喜的。
作者已经在推上就完成度低谢过罪了,白嫖伸手党也可以随便辱骂唾弃作者的话,我比较痛心。

3.关于不卖电子版我猜测可能是作者的某种个人坚持,艺术家总有些奇怪的执着点。欢迎有了解的大佬科普。可以去推特下留言或私信问作者电子版相关事宜,但如果问了作者还是不出是否应该尊重而不是抱怨呢?

4.这本的做爱场景秉承老师一贯风格, 只有短短6p,但分镜、动态、神情、已经比之前的精致很多。 有些人只看到了画面的低完成度,而我看到了作者对故事的把控能力、分镜功力的进化。

是网络获取信息太容易,大家都被养刁钻了么?关于拍照分享我也做过,初心是希望自己喜欢的小众漫画家老师能让更多人认识,或结识些同好。这种分享精神正是互联网发展的重要一环,无偿看了别人的分享还要骂一嘴踩一脚显得素质屌差。
我是不想拆书+没扫描仪的情况下看很久也没有扫图流出上传过几本。 没怎么组织语言,说的比较乱,还请见谅。
Posted on 11 October 2023, 07:53 by:   akasiki4058    PM
Score +23
作者画牛的情感和前因后果描写是一绝,但是铺垫这么多正戏有点少还是不够爽。还有这个产能……每次都会有好几页草稿,真的是只能用悲剧来形容了
Posted on 11 October 2023, 07:55 by:   Orion9137    PM
Score +23
Probably his worst yet in terms of not finishing the book.
Posted on 11 October 2023, 08:03 by:   qq523886929    PM
Score +13
话说这个都放出了,魅魔那本我还是没看到。
Posted on 11 October 2023, 12:29 by:   JSQ947zyz    PM
Score +18
作者推特上c101那本下面就有人问过能不能出电子版的,作者回复说了有其他方面的原因,不会出。所以想看就只能扫本,就我个人感觉,作者这种画风还挺有意思的。作者已经确定参加c103了,不知道还会不会秉持这种画风继续画下去,站里现在好像c101的那本还没有,不知道哪位佬能发出来。
Posted on 11 October 2023, 14:40 by:   MisterPC    PM
Score +12
爹更新了

不是,这个草稿就算和之前的比起来也有点多的夸张了吧
Last edited on 11 October 2023, 15:36.
Posted on 14 November 2023, 07:59 by:   plzs    PM
Score +6
把苦主画成草稿,没绷住
Posted on 31 March 2024, 07:56 by:   agagllk    PM
Score +6
这个本没汉化看着有点困难,剧情理解也不是很清楚。
首先女主对苦主到底有没有感情?她在床上说的从小时候起就喜欢哥哥,这是逢场做戏呢?还是真心实意?
另外女主对哥哥那么好也是由此而来的问题。如果她一直就喜欢哥哥,所以对他很好冷落了弟弟,这说得通。但是如果说对哥哥没什么特别的情感就这样成天陪着的话。。。。
实际上有点像男闺蜜吧?苦主(男友)对于女主花费太多时间在哥哥(男闺蜜)身上而不满,吵了一架后女主毅然决然站在另一边,最后变成这种结局。当然这是一个不合适的比喻就是了

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